david
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Evening
Nov 23, 2005 12:38:01 GMT -5
Post by david on Nov 23, 2005 12:38:01 GMT -5
Sun sleeps in the west
hidden under night's blanket
frogs sing lullabyes
- david
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Evening
Nov 23, 2005 13:08:27 GMT -5
Post by Ken Corbett on Nov 23, 2005 13:08:27 GMT -5
The last line caught my mind's eye, and I enjoyed the image then and am enjoying it now.
Ken
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david
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Nov 23, 2005 13:49:10 GMT -5
Post by david on Nov 23, 2005 13:49:10 GMT -5
Thank you, Ken.
Coming from you, that means a lot!
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Evening
Nov 23, 2005 16:01:05 GMT -5
Post by Elle Rush on Nov 23, 2005 16:01:05 GMT -5
Sweet! I also like the line about frogs singing lullabies- creative and visual.
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david
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Nov 23, 2005 16:29:59 GMT -5
Post by david on Nov 23, 2005 16:29:59 GMT -5
Thank you, too, Elle. You're always so encouraging  |
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daemona
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Nov 24, 2005 13:09:20 GMT -5
Post by daemona on Nov 24, 2005 13:09:20 GMT -5
beautifully done david :-D now what i´ve been thinking (i just hope i´m not wrong with this ;-) ) is "lullaBYEs" in the last line intentionally? Like sun saying bye? I thought so because i somehow have in mind its actually spelled "lullabies" normally? *think think* Well because if so i think its a great thing...  |
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david
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Nov 24, 2005 14:16:06 GMT -5
Post by david on Nov 24, 2005 14:16:06 GMT -5
i wish i could take credit for "sun saying bye" thing, daemona...especially since you think the idea would have been such a great thing  Actually, I just wasn't sure if it was properly spelled "lullabies" or "lullabyes" .... Sorry to disappoint  and sorry, too, that i didn't think of that! |
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daemona
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Nov 25, 2005 15:00:43 GMT -5
Post by daemona on Nov 25, 2005 15:00:43 GMT -5
awe don´t have that crying face...don´t be sad... i don´t want to make people sad with what i write  it was just a thought that occured and even without it i still think its a very nice haiku p.s.: besides you could have simply answered "yes" lol |
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and sorry, too, that i didn't think of that!