Roadpan
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The Essential Pegasus
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Post by Roadpan on Mar 24, 2003 14:09:39 GMT -5
Moonlit delirium balances Corduroy reflections in time, Like diner stool remembers The blonde with pierced navel, And how she ate to Regain the form She fled from, Through His Lies;
Told, Stool’s blushed, Deep veneer Cracked with her pain, And purging belongs Only to the cheap white Fabric pulling a frown free— Antipathy repeated in Diner’s serenading neon sign.
Roadpan © 2003
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Post by Elle Rush on Mar 24, 2003 14:37:49 GMT -5
ooohhhh...! You did the reflective nonet~ Cool!!
I like the first one... relateable, in ways to me.
Excellent work on this weeks challenge! I better get my rear in gear!
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Roadpan
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Post by Roadpan on Mar 24, 2003 17:41:54 GMT -5
lol ... I don't know what I'm doing, but it was fun to try.
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Post by Randacello (MirandaRae) on Mar 25, 2003 16:36:32 GMT -5
Nah....I'M the one who doesn't know what they're doing, Todd. This is very vivid for me, very visual. I especially liked the very last line and 'Corduroy reflections in time'. Miranda
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Roadpan
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Post by Roadpan on Mar 25, 2003 18:12:53 GMT -5
Thank you. I'm glad you liked it.
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