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Post by PoetOfSerendipity on Feb 19, 2006 23:43:15 GMT -5
Wrote this at 3 in the morning when the the walls come down and the emotions become more bare.... Indomitable Love
late at night the poet’s passion free, unchained
feelings well up a dormant volcano still smoldering, aching for release
hugs without a home knowing the need and yet forbidden from bringing comfort
flowing magma beneath the surface passion denied, hidden, the wild indomitable cry of true love Thought about changing indomitable to unconquerable... yes?? no??? thoughts??
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Post by Elle Rush on Feb 21, 2006 12:42:53 GMT -5
I like it the way it is.... but can see it both ways. I love the line "hugs without a home" thoughtful and soulful. A longing and vulnerability well-expressed here!!
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Post by Solace512 on Feb 23, 2006 10:57:10 GMT -5
I feel the deep yearning in this one. Lovely write! I agree with Elle, I love the line "hugs without a home", very nice!
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