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Post by Elle Rush on Dec 16, 2005 15:05:15 GMT -5
Wind Serenade She whispers suddenly I...............love.........you her words made impact echoing through the room as a gust of wind picked them up and carried them away~ As the wind hit his face, the words were blown into his heart and he knew then that he would never forget. Suspended for a moment, then let down tenderly~ At that same moment she smiled to herself feeling the light kiss of serenade on her cheek, causing her to blush while she lay on her bed cradling his reply. elle rush copyright 2001 note: Thank you, Ken for your help in the last line
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Post by Ken Corbett on Dec 16, 2005 18:31:05 GMT -5
Elle,
This is a tender and delicate, caring piece, as gentle as the wind you use to convey the message of love. I especially enjoy the use of 'serenade' and 'cradling his reply.'
Ken
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Post by PoetOfSerendipity on Dec 17, 2005 2:57:16 GMT -5
Soft and sweet Elle....
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Post by Elle Rush on Dec 19, 2005 15:00:47 GMT -5
Thanks, guys .... Thank you, Ken for your suggestions in the last line- Much better!
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