daemona
Avid Muse
Life is full of hidden secrets
Posts: 216
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desire
Dec 3, 2005 14:05:56 GMT -5
Post by daemona on Dec 3, 2005 14:05:56 GMT -5
Burning for you in a way that leaves no choice; but I do have indeed a reason for what I do: DESIRE
It´s the power forcing me to fight all the sharp teethed bats and weakening spiders that crawl on the moist ground building a distance between me and you.
I conquered them all passed the living walls of fur and wings. Finally I can come close to you close enough to smell your aromatic scent of maleness and mystery.
But in a world consisting of paradoxes and irony the moment of glory all too often turns into a moment of revelation showing me how I didn´t win but loose that desire had fooled and blinded me.
Because I now understand that all the creatures were yours they all descended from the same loved hands!
Placing them on my path was only your choosen way to play your game with me.
I´m caught in betrayal standing numbed as you´re creatures again form a wall jail walls this time that keep me where you want me while you bite my neck and gain pleasure from my blood.
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david
Avid Muse
Posts: 182
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desire
Dec 3, 2005 20:48:34 GMT -5
Post by david on Dec 3, 2005 20:48:34 GMT -5
My gosh, this is SO good ... It's all masterful, but the intro and ending are especially magnificent!
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desire
Dec 3, 2005 21:23:57 GMT -5
Post by Elle Rush on Dec 3, 2005 21:23:57 GMT -5
Masterful is a great way to describe the vision, the longing, the skill each word has in having impact- Impact it has, all the way- again, you are in an extra creartive vibe, I feel it, Go with it and keep inking it out on paper. This is really super writing. Powerful!!
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desire
Dec 14, 2005 0:09:48 GMT -5
Post by PoetOfSerendipity on Dec 14, 2005 0:09:48 GMT -5
wow... the sense of entrapment and betrayal you've captured so VERY well. I've never understood people who can do this....
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