Angst in the Sunshine

[RamirezGhost]

Let me be. My eyes, two black stones
in wells light-pitted, cannot endure

your coming and going;
how you gleam, dissolve. I am red by you.

I am red when I should be granite.
I do not belong to you
and would have killed myself
beneath you if not blinded

in your star-sheen daybreak, summer high—
oh, it felt like hell, a fault parting.

But there is nothing to do and nothing to do.
I swell fondly to trapping you in glass,

to make shadows from you:
spinning children, round nurses,

a boy beneath the sun with blue skin
and a scar.

[Elle Rush]

I picked out your signature line right away... it is contemplating. I was wondering the origin of it, when.. here it is! Spectacular line, and poem. I am struck by that 2nd couplet- a very engrossing piece!

[Randacello (MirandaRae)]

The first two lines (my favorite part of this piece) drew me in and the rest of the piece wouldn't let me go. Elle called this 'engrossing', I have to agree.


Miranda

[Roadpan]

I swell fondly to trapping you in glass

My favorite line.

Quixotic almost in its capturing of the mind.

[ItalyAngel]

"in your star-sheen daybreak, summer high—
oh, it felt like hell, a fault parting.." Your words are as haunting and well written as those of Sylvia Plath! You just might be her ghost

[AquarianM]

I know a guy who would just say "run for your life" after reading this, because it feels like the discovery of doom in a lover's embrace. I think maybe I'll say it reminds me we're not always right when listening to our hearts.

Dan