Roadpan
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Post by Roadpan on Mar 24, 2003 18:09:18 GMT -5
I cry In the wilderness, Aloof in my Integrity. Night bends me, On occasion, To meet the folk Holding sovereignty Like bibles Strapped to bombs. Forward, I See the champaign & an eye Of river Needing bled: Foul urine wind rigid premature Sand-glass toggles Pierce my view. Estranged, march Forward, I do, Gathering a young Girl, naked near A spent bomb, Where, molested, By nature, By man, By me, By bibles & nuclear thunderstorms, She prays In her knee-chin curl: Hair-matted blood Seed strands like roots Of dead flowers Growing, wind-swept Death bloom chilling Her fingers When wrapped Around the stern Of my head. She smiles— Dirty, broken, sour— Against my eyes, & I cry, Ashamed In the light of her Sympathetic mien.
Roadpan © 2003
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Post by RamirezGhost on Mar 24, 2003 18:27:49 GMT -5
A step further and this could be pushing both religion and politics, but in its current form its perfectly balanced. A bit wordy at times, but a good read nonetheless.
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Roadpan
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Post by Roadpan on Mar 24, 2003 18:32:58 GMT -5
I am long in the pen at times. Thank you!
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Post by Elle Rush on Mar 24, 2003 21:46:06 GMT -5
Some thoughtful, intense lines here, Todd...
these strike me so candidly:
Like bibles Strapped to bombs.
Impactful piece that makes one think. Controversial, yes-and I like that!
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Post by Randacello (MirandaRae) on Mar 25, 2003 16:46:29 GMT -5
Very stark and helpless images for me, Todd. I like it though. Need to go back for seconds to make sure I got everything.
Miranda
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Roadpan
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Post by Roadpan on Mar 25, 2003 18:18:17 GMT -5
I think this is mostly a vent. I'm glad you both enjoyed it.
Thank you...
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Post by Elle Rush on Mar 26, 2003 14:14:23 GMT -5
How we need the release! Venting is good- keep doing it!
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Roadpan
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Post by Roadpan on Mar 31, 2003 20:20:58 GMT -5
I'm trying ... lol ... they don't come as often as they used to.
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