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Post by willowdown on Nov 19, 2010 6:08:41 GMT -5
Dance for a penny beneath the moon where shadows waltz with statues and the purple-tressed hamadryads of the Wood flirt with fauns and centaurs.
Dance for tuppence beneath the stars in cathedrals of nodding corn over which the hungry owls swoop and bats spread their nets of rumour.
Dance for thrippence beneath the sea and bring my drowned true love to me - look at how her pearly teeth gleam, her coral lips and eyes like caves wherein the sleeping beasts of beauty dream.
Dance for fourpence on marionette strings, stamp your hooves and beat your wings! Between the Earth and Heaven's Gate demented gods decide men's fate.
Dance for a fivepenny tumbler of gin and toast the little man within - toast him in the flames of Hell and drown him in a sheer, smooth well...
Dance for a silver sixpence, my love, my sweetheart, my bruiser, my proud turtle-dove. If we dance for an hour we'll dance the whole day and then wise Elijah will give us our pay.
We'll out-dance Old Chaos and out-dance the dawn: we'll dance on the doorstep where maids leave abortions and heroes are born; we'll dance to the tune of Old Nick's tambourine on the desolate heath where the world's cold winds keen and when we've done dancing for sixpence or less, we'll dance for a shilling for a shilling is best!
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Post by AquarianM on Nov 26, 2010 3:47:20 GMT -5
Joyful & exhuberant. I love the panache.
Dan
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Post by Ken Corbett on Dec 3, 2010 9:46:47 GMT -5
I know you wanted the shock of maids leaving abortions, but I found it discordant. I like your rhythm and imagery here very much, apart from that, especially the fourth verse.
Maybe the maid could leave something less gruesome, more romantic .... but that's up 2 u.
Ken
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Post by Elle Rush on Jun 12, 2012 0:22:11 GMT -5
Rhythmic & mysterious. I like the contradiction of tone & dark elements.. almost like an irish folklore dance or something, very cool.
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